1- Companies need to exploit the marketing potential of the Internet, and web pages can provide both advertising and customer support. -This thesis doesn’t clearly state what they are going to be talking about. They clearly are taking a positive stand on marking potential on the Internet but they don’t really get anymore specific than that. They should present one main idea with supporting arguments. I would suggest: Web pages can provide both advertising and customer support for companies and they must begin to exploit the marketing potential of the Internet to be successful. 2- World hunger has many causes and effects. -This statement isn’t even a full sentence and it is very boring and unspecific. They aren’t really taking a stand on anything and make it seem like they are just going to begin to list causes and effects. I would suggest (depending on their stance): The effects of world hunger are seen in the many faces that suffer, but it is time to look into what is causing it. 3- People use many lawn chemicals. -This is just a boring statement not telling me what they are going to talk about. It isn’t specific and doesn’t make a stand on anything. They are just pointing out a product people use. They are making an observation not an assertion. This statement doesn’t open anything up for a discussion. I would suggest: that they make a point to specify what they are writing about lawn chemicals for (are they dangerous, helpful, etc..). They must make some sort of stance in this statement so that they reader can follow the order of their logic. 4- The thesis of this paper is the difficulty of solving our environmental problems. -This thesis is making more of an announcement than a stand for solving environmental problems. They should be more specific as to the difficulties that come with solving these problems. Is this paper about the