- its a detailed
- feels real
- to the point
- it doesnt have any climax
- short senteces which dialouge format
- into intro, started in the middle on the scene and you are trying to figure out whats going on.
- it requires the the reader to read between the lines.
- saying her dad is old, sad, loving, alone, depressed
- descriptive language
- appealing to senses - crums felt, heating from the vent,
- not being explicit about everything
- double meaning dialogues
- leaving things unsaid to lead the reader into the story and making the reader understand the story in their own way.
- short sentences, simple language, detailing, easy to read, short sentences, childs honesty,
- time was the center of attension since the writer merely described 13 minutes so beautifully.
- i like the ending since it left me to wonder if she was on time, or how the rest of the day was, and what happend after that.
- I would like to see an introduction rather than a story which starts in the middle of the scene.

The writer does not being the story with an introduction rather the writer just starts the story in the middle of a scene. The major attraction in the first paragraph is the detailing of the scene. The writer uses very simple and easy language yet the writer is very detailed about what is happening. The writer does a very good job on making the reader imagine the scene. As you progress with the story it's noticeable that the sentences are very short and to the point. The story is the description of a girl’s thirteen minutes of her day until its time for her to watch the sesame street. The story is realistic and original.

The story allows the reader to think since the story uses double meaning and requires you to read between the lines. You can interpret the story in your own way due to implicitness of the writing. The major theme of the story is the emotions which a person goes through while waiting for something they want. It also signifies that when you have nothing to do your observation power increases. Since the girl notices different thing about her dad which she wouldn’t notice if she was busy with something else. The story also shows the sweet connection between the dad and the daughter. It tells about the loneliness and the caring nature of the father.

My favourite part of the story is the ending since it leaves a question mark in the reader’s mind. It makes you wonder what happened next, how was the rest of the day for them and what was the show sesame street about and why did the girl wanted to watch the show. My suggestion to the writer would be to include an introduction to the story so that the reader knows what to expect from the story.