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State of Confusion Marlon Sutton
Bus/415
March/28/2012
Aaron Towns
State of Confusion Tanya Trucker who owns a trucking company is filling a suit that involves the state of confusion. Requiring all [Writing suggestion: "All" or "all of" used as an intensifier very often can be removed with no loss of meaning] trucks and towing trailer, that [Remove comma before "that" preceding a restrictive phrase (otherwise replace "that" with "which")] use the highways to use a B-type truck hitch. Tanya Tucker and other trucker feel [Style suggestion: if "felt" is used in the sense of "to believe or think," it is a cliché and vague; use a form of "believe" or "think"] that this is imposing expenses which [Use "that" for a restrictive phrase (or place a comma before "which")] are unfair because of this action filling a suit against confusion to overturn this statue [Check spelling. This is a carving in marble; a rule, law, established policy, etc. is a "statute"] is an act of defense.
What court will have jurisdiction over Tanya’s suit? [Writing suggestion: Unless in a quote or a title, avoid rhetorical questions in academic writing. A good idea is to provide answers, not questions] Why The court that has jurisdiction over Tanya suit would be state of confusion, because [Remove comma; "because" is not a conjunction] of this the state may be bias [This word is a noun; the adjective is "biased"] of the decision made in the case, and therefore, it can become a federal court issue the Constitution, controversies between two or more states and between a State [Do not capitalize without the complete name of the institution (unless in a citation or as the first word in a sentence)] [Do not capitalize this word (unless it begins a sentence)] and Citizen of another State( Lectric [Leave a space before the opening parenthesis] [Remove the space after the parenthesis] Law Library, 2010). [Writing suggestion: If this sentence is as long as 50 or more words, it can be confusing because it can have logic twists, recursions, or long lists. Cut it into shorter sentences featuring one idea. Shorter sentences are easier to comprehend] The federal jurisdiction will still have the dominion to decide if it is valid or not, even though this is a state statue. Is the Confusion statute constitutional? Discuss your [Eliminate second person (you, your) in academic documents and avoid addressing the reader directly. Prefer third-person pronouns (he, she, they, it)] legal reasoning According to U.S. Constitution he judicial Power shall extend to all Cases, in Law and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] Equity, arising under this Constitution, the Laws of the United States, and Treaties made, or which [Use "that" for a restrictive phrase (or place a comma before "which")] shall be made [The passive voice is a form of "be" (be) and a participle (made). Over-use of the passive voice can make paragraphs officious and tedious to read. Prefer the active voice. For example, passive voice = The paper was completed on time. Active voice = the student completed the paper on time. See Center for Writing Excellence > Tutorials & Guides > Grammar & Writing Guides > Active & passive voice] , under their Authority: Article III Section 2. Thomson (2012) He judicial Power shall extend to all Cases, in Law and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] Equity, arising under this Constitution, the Laws of the United States, and Treaties made, or which [Use "that" for a restrictive phrase (or place a comma before "which")] shall be made [Passive voice ] , under their Authority to Controversies to which the United States shall be a Party;--to Thomson (2012) Controversies between two or more States;--between a State [Do not capitalize this word (unless it begins a sentence)] [Do not capitalize without the complete name of the institution (unless in a citation or as the first word in a sentence)] and Citizens of another State;--between Citizens of different States;--between Citizens of the same State [Do not capitalize without the complete name of the institution (unless in a citation or as the first word in a sentence)] [Do not capitalize this word (unless it begins a sentence)] claiming Lands under Grants of different States, [Do not capitalize without the complete name of the institution (unless in a citation or as the first word in a sentence)] and between a State, [Do not capitalize without the complete name of the institution (unless in a citation or as the first word in a sentence)] or the Citizens thereof, and foreign States, Citizens or [Insert a comma before this word if this is the last in a list of more than two -- or if it begins a new clause] Subjects (Thomson, 2012, para. [Sentence too long] ). Under the constitution [If this refers to the United States Constitution, capitalize it, whether or not it is preceded by "the U.S."] the suit is unconstitutional because of the B-type hitch is only mandated [awkward wording. Place "only" next to the word it modifies. Try "is mandated only"] [Passive voice ] in confusion and not all. What provisions of the U.S. Constitution will be applied by a court to determine the statute’s validity Federal Questions Resulting from Special Jurisdictional Grants.--In the Labor-Management Relations Act of 1947, (Thomson, 2012, Para. ). Congress authorized federal courts to entertain suits for violation of collective bargaining agreements without respect to the amount in controversy or the citizenship of the parties. 686.--In the Labor-Management Relations Act of 1947, Congress authorized federal courts to entertain suits for violation of collective bargaining agreements without respect to the amount in controversy or the citizenship of the parties, (Thomson, 2012, Para. ). . 686 Sec. 301, 61 Stat. 156 [A numeral to start a sentence is inappropriate in academic writing--write out the number or restructure the sentence] (1947), 29 U.S.C. [write acronyms without periods (unless these are initials in a name) ] Sec. 185 in this law it determine whether [Use "whether" when the situation has more than one possible outcome. If there is just one result, prefer "if" ] Tanya Tucker trucking company a small business have the right to make a decision cornering it profit and future. Is Tanya likely to prevail on her suit? Explain the reasons for your [second person] answer
Tanya is likely to prevail on her suit because confusion is requiring all trucks to use the B-type truck hitch. Because of profits from the use of the B-type hitch, which the state will make, has arose, in this suit even though this state is the only one that is [Wordiness: see if you can remove "that" or "that is"] requiring the truck hitch B-type be use. The road way is a town that many trucks run, confusion and [in academic writing, if this is a series, place a comma before the final conjunction (and)] the citizen that [Check word usage--If this word refers to a human being, people are never "that" or "which," they are "who"] drive on the roads state that it will make the road more safe for them [Check pronoun agreement--if "them" refers to "citizen" (or a singular subject), it should be singular, too (him or her)] , therefor [Misspelling: therefore] Tanya would likely be defeated [Passive voice ] because of the sole purpose of income and safe issue. Set forth in detail the stages of a civil suit.
There are stages that make up a civil suit the initial court papers that are [Writing suggestion: rewrite the sentence to remove "that are"] filed [Passive voice ] at the beginning of the court case (Find Law, 2010)
Second stage in the court civil suit is the fact-finding and discovery (Bosco,).
Third stage in a civil suit is the resolution before the trail court motion (Bosco,).
Forth [Check spelling--"forth" means "forward in time" or "out into notice"; "fourth" is the ordinal number corresponding to "four"] stage in the civil suit is the resolution before the trail settlement or alternative dispute resolution (Bosco,)
Fifth stage in the civil suit is trail and verdict in the civil trail a judge or jury examines the evidence to decide whether [Use "whether" when the situation has more than one possible outcome. If there is just one result, prefer "if" ] “(by a preponderance of the evidence) (Find Law, 2010). [Sentence too long]
Six stage in a civil suit is the after the judgments and collecting the money.
Seven and last in a civil suit is the appeals (Find Law, 2010). Most civil case decision can be subject to be reviewed [Passive voice ] an appeals court. The appeal court can revise the decision if an error is found in the court decision.
Conclusion
There are different departments in the world that may want to regulate state statue, such as road ways and highway. Tanya Tucker has filed a suit with state of confusion which [Use "that" for a restrictive phrase (or place a comma before "which")] is overturn to the federal courts because of a bias decision of the B-type hitch. Not only does the state make them they are forcing other trucking companies to use their product or not to travel throw their town. This act is unconditional and unconstitutional. Tanya is optimistic that the courts will rule in her favor. Before the federal court make a ruling concerning this matter, if the statue is not constitutional or is constitutional, the state of confusion has required all trucks to use B-type hitch, he courts will decide whether this statue will stay in effect or not.

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