Name: Anon
Professor: E. K.
Sweatshop Exercise Assignment
Part 1: By applying the Universal Intellectual Standards, four errors or violations have been identified in the essay “Sweatshirts from Sweatshops”. The information contained in this essay was apparently gathered from an investigation report conducted by the WorldWeave Foundation, of course mentioned only by the writer, more on this later. One of the first thing I noticed as a violation is the use of emotional manipulation. Countless times, the author would tried to appeals to the reader’s emotional side by putting focuses mainly on the story of the little girl and not providing any supports for the argument with any sort of statistics, interviews, or documents. For instance, the writer will mention how the little girl would “working hour after hour” while “trying not to collapse from the heat”. First of all the writer is just working under the assumption that the girl do work a lot of hours (we won’t even go into how much hour is too much) and that the heat is unbearable. Unless there are any actually interviews or documentations stating that the author had witnessed the condition of the workplace, these statements are all irrelevant.
Coming back to how the information was used from a report done by the “WorldWeave Foundation”, that will us to the second violation. This is more of an accuracy error as the many facts stated in this essay are untraceable. There no citations of online articles or report websites to credit and verify these statements. And by far these cannot be statements, since again the author uses many subjective terms such as “children who appeared to be as young as eleven or twelve”. How is this statement when it is purely subjective? Both of these errors mentioned can be corrected if the author had actually provided actual proof of documentation and interview from these workers.