Draft
This writer conveys many attributes in regards to this piece work. He has captured the audience by appealing to a rather deep, profound and creative thinking mind. He draws the audience by projecting themselves into the reality of the story. For example the author immediately paints a picture in the readers mind with a vivid imagination of morning i.e. sunrise, by using small structured sentences in the opening, which gives us short burst of informative and the descriptive writing explaining each detail. Every noun having an adjective alongside it.
The opening sentences sets a very dull and dark theme as the author describes the morning using the words ‘black’ and ‘brittle’. These words also climates the audience into reality of what his surroundings were and the how the writer manipulated the setting into making us pre think of who and what he is in those short structured sentences with effect. This automatically paints a gloomy image. As the character is introduced, he is referred by his surname, this shows lack of respect shown to the character. him ‘lying on an old coat he found’ also gives the impression along with the descriptive short and long sentences in regards to his surrounding i.e. a cottage in remote area away from civilisation portrays a stereotypical view of a scruffy scrawny man living is a desolate cottage. McGill seems like a shy hesitant reclusive character he hesitated in opening the door and replying to the little girl. This is a juxtaposition of the juvenile character which the writer has epitomised as young and innocent. This enables him to showcase and explore the emotional state of McGill and express another side of his character and personality.
The figurative language was very effective. The author uses the word ‘winked’ to personify the suns light beaming through. Thought out the whole passage a lot of metaphors and