After reviewing the editing changes that WritePoint suggested, I realized that I had very few grammar mistakes. One mistake I made was with the word e-mail. I originally left out the hyphen in between the ‘e’ and the ‘m.’ I was unaware that was needed. Another mistake I made was the use of a phrasal verb ‘find out.’ A phrasal verb is two words together that mean something different from their individual meanings. Leaving a space after a comma was another mistake I incurred. Although it is just a simple mistake that I overlooked, it still affects the professionalism of my paper. It was also revealed that you do not capitalize the word president unless you are referring a specific president or stating the President of the United States. I also learned that if two words function as an adjective, they should be connected with a hyphen. For example, real time should be real-time. My review from WritePoint was better than I thought regarding my editing changes.
Regarding the revision changes, according to WritePoint brought out that I use the passive voice. When writing an essay the passive voice can tend to agitate the reader because your paragraphs become officious and tedious. You must remain consistent with the active voice while writing. For example I wrote, “Within the same study it was indicated that 35% of Americans watched political videos online.” To remain consistent with an active voice throughout the sentence the writer should write, “Within the same study statistic revealed that 35% of Americans watched political videos online.” Replacing “it was indicated” with “statistics revealed” allowed my active voice to stay consistent and not agitate the reader. Another revision change that WritePoint identified was wordiness. Simplifying a sentence is one of the easiest errors to correct. You have to look for that extra word in a sentence that does not affect the rhythm of your sentence when absent. Instead of writing, “I like my newspaper and then coffee in the morning” you can write “I like my newspaper and coffee in the morning.” Removing the word “then” allows the writer to have a smooth transition from the sentence before to the one after. Another revision change included using “we,” us” or “our” to mean yourself or co-authors, not general humanity or yourself and the reader. After analyzing the information received from I am more confident and informed than I was before the review.
The next steps to be taken in the revision process include making all the necessary editing changes. My biggest focus will be to make sure I write in the active voice and not the passive voice. Instead of saying “it was” or “there are” I am better off referring directly to the thing I am speaking about. The step is to make sure my sentences are not wordy. I will do this by having someone else read my essay to me so that I can hear how sentences are structured and removing any excess words without affecting the rhythm of my essay.

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After reviewing the editing changes that WritePoint suggested I [Place comma before this word if this is the end of the introductory phrase (beginning with "After")] realized [Avoid use of the first person (I, me, my) in academic writing unless writing about a personal experience. Check first person use with your instructor. ] that I had very few grammar mistakes. One mistake I made was with the word e-mail. I originally left out the hyphen in between the ‘e’ and the ‘m.’ I was unaware that was needed [The passive voice is a form of "be" (was) and a participle (needed). Over-use of the passive voice can make paragraphs officious and tedious to read. Try to use the active voice most often; for example, passive voice = The paper was completed on time. Active voice = the student completed the paper on time--See Center for Writing Excellence > Tutorials & Guides > Grammar & Writing Guides > Active & passive voice] . Another mistake I made was the usage [Check spelling: "Usage" refers primarily to legal procedures or grammar; most writing situations call for "use"] of a phrasal verb ‘find out ["find out" is a "phrasal verb," two words that together mean something different from their individual meanings--looking up each word in the dictionary would not produce the meaning, which could cause misinterpretation in an international business communication. Use other words, like "discover," or simply remove "out"] .’ A phrasal verb is two words together that mean something different from their individual meanings. Leaving a space after a comma was another mistake I incurred. Although it’s [Contractions are inappropriate in college writing, spell out--it is] just a simple mistake that I overlooked, it still affects the professionalism of my paper. It was also revealed that you [Eliminate second person (you, your) in academic documents and avoid addressing the reader directly. Use third-person pronouns (he, she, it, they)] do not capitalize the word president unless you [second person] are referring a specific president or stating the President [This is not capitalized unless part of a proper name (President John Doe) or to mean the President of the United States] of the United States. I also learned that if two words function as an adjective, they should be connected [Passive voice ] with a hyphen. For example, real time should be real-time. Overall [Wordiness: unless meaning denim work clothes, "overall" is general and vague and contributes little to the sentence] my review from WritePoint was better than I thought regarding my editing changes. Regarding the revision changes, according to WritePoint brought out the fact that [Wordiness--"the fact that" can often be reduced to simply "that"] I use the passive voice. When writing an essay the passive voice can tend to agitate the reader because your [second person] paragraphs become officious and tedious. You [second person] must remain consistent with the active voice while writing. For example I wrote, “Within the same study it was indicated that 35% of Americans watched political videos online”. [A period or comma goes inside the closing quotation mark] To remain consistent with an active voice throughout the sentence the writer [If this means yourself, avoid referring to yourself in the third person; if this is a personal account, use the first person (I, me, my)] should write, “Within the same study statistic revealed that 35% of Americans watched political videos online.” Replacing “it was indicated” with “statistics revealed” allowed my active voice to stay consistent and not agitate the reader. Another revision change that WritePoint identified was wordiness. Simplifying a sentence is one of the easiest errors to correct. You [second person] have to look for that extra word in a sentence that does not affect the rhythm of your sentence when absent. Instead of writing, “I like my newspaper and then coffee in the morning” you can write “I like my newspaper and coffee in the morning”. [A period or comma goes inside the closing quotation mark] Removing the word “then” allows the writer to have a smooth transition from the sentence before to the one after. Another revision change included using “we,” us” or “our” to mean yourself or co-authors, not general humanity or yourself and the reader. After analyzing the information received from I am more confident and informed than I [Place comma before this word if this is the end of the introductory phrase (beginning with "After")] before the review. The next steps to be taken in the revision process include making all the necessary editing changes. My biggest focus will be to make sure I write in the active voice and not the passive voice. Instead of saying “it was” or “there are” I am better off referring directly to the actual [Cliché: "actual" and "actually" are weak words whose meaning is nothing more than "in point of fact." They are often used as intensifiers but usually can be deleted with no change in meaning ] thing I am speaking about. The step is to make sure my sentences are not wordy. I will do this by having someone else read my essay to me so that I can hear how sentences are structured [Passive voice ] and removing any excess words without affecting the rhythm of my essay.