...College Essay Most college scholarships ask you to write a 500+ word essay, which isn’t that bad, but what is the reason behind it? Do most people that require an essay ever read them? Seriously, who has time to read a 1000+ word essay and chose from the best. Personally, that doesn’t seem to be fair because most people have trouble writing a paragraph, and then we are expected to write a huge essay telling about something in our life or respond to a weird question with a topic that most people won’t even think about. With topics such as, “Explain how your life changed with a death of a parent,”or “How would college affect your career,” or even “Why I deserve this scholarship.” Well, I’m going to explain everything I possibly can. The death of any parent would make anyone change, because no one is the same; we are all unique. With my dad’s death I didn’t know how to act for the longest time, and I still don’t; I say this because the day my father died, the doctor called all of my family back where he lay, hooked up to life support, lifeless. Just looking at his body, I didn't feel anything; however, I looked at the situation as is he wasn’t really dead because I was 12 and didn’t know...
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...According to Webster’s dictionary and opportunity is a good chance for advancement or progress. Allowing me write this essay for a chance at a scholarship is very meaningful to me in a way that it allows me to share who I am and what I strive for So why do I deserve the Phi Theta Kappa scholarship? I am willing to work hard, meet new people and help in any way possible. Financially speaking, the Phi Theta Kappa scholarship will really help me and my family. As the saying goes, every penny counts. I am a first generation American citizen, as my family comes from Mexico. My parents are citizens and worked very hard to earn that title. Before I was even born, my parents worked their way to citizenship; they didn’t use me as an “anchor baby.”...
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...I’m sure many people are qualified for this scholarship. They probably all say how they’ve loved animals ever sense they were young and how this has been there dream ever sense they were little, now I’m going to tell you why I feel like I deserve this scholarship. Yes, ever sense I was a little girl I’ve wanted to be an animal cop and yes this is my dream, but I’ve worked hard for this dream. I love to help animals in need. Some people say that some animals don’t deserve a home but I feel like some people don’t deserve an animal. I have over 300 hours at my local animal shelter and it is just sad on why some animals come into the shelter neglect, abuse, and just the fact they don’t want them anymore. What I’ve learned is people want babies so we are stuck with a lot of older animals at the shelter. Every animal deserves a second chance its just takes one person to save a life and I want to be the one who help them find each other. I am also an animal foster parent. I take home animals that are either to young to go up for adoption or hurt. Sadly not all the animals make it, I’ve actually brought home two foster kittens a week later one pasted away then a week after that the second one pasted. It’s a risk every time you take home a foster animal because trust me loose one hurts more then anything. I also take animals off the street or from people that just shouldn’t have an animal. Actually this past week I took a kitten that this girl little sister found. They kept him...
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...responsible for. C. Today I’d like to speak to you about why these athletes deserve some type of pay, first off on how it’s becoming more of a job nowadays, how they contribute, and why people believe they don’t. Body Paragraph #1 Claim: Playing big time sports in college is starting to become more of a job than an extracurricular activity. A. Robert and Amy McCormick think it’s definitively a job for football and basketball players on athletic scholarships at big time Division-1 schools, they argue that they are treated as “employees” under federal labor laws and entitled to form unions and negotiate hours and working conditions. B. “There are many more demands put on these young men than any employee of the university,” says Robert McCormick. “These young men are laboring under very strict and arduous conditions, so they really are laborers in terms of physical demands on them while they’re also trying to go to attend school at the same time. C. The player might have to postpone taking courses until the summer. Athletes don’t have free choice of what major they take if the classes conflict with practice schedules. “There are similarities to it being a job, as I look back there is a time allotment that is expected of you,” says Hicks a 1991 graduate. Transitional Sentence: Therefor it should be looked at as more of a job nowadays rather than an extracurricular activity. Body Paragraph #2 Claim: The scholarship size should be increased or a small salary should be...
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...I deserve the scholarship for several reasons. My determination, current circumstances, financial need, motivation to change Korean Community to the best and to achieve better are all the reasons why I believe I deserve a scholarship. The first reason is because I am very determinate to change the future to the better place. When I found my passion to study computer science in University of Maryland Baltimore County, I knew that my whole world will change. I spend years of my life searching for way to help and assist people who need physical or medical help without any blood needed. I found that by producing robotic body parts that will function just like regular body with the brain signals. I believe by following my passion to program such things, I can achieve my determination. This brings up to why I deserve this scholarship in my current circumstances and for my financial needs. I am currently in F-1, student visa which includes my father and my younger brother. Even though we have been live in United States for more than 8 years now, we needed to apply the school as in international student since we do not have a green card. Our family has applied to green card but the process itself is unknown which might take several years to be approved. In such a position, my brother just got accepted to the college however, in order to support 3 house holders outer tuition; it is tremendously expensive for our circumstances. Our family holds either F-1 or F-2 status that unable our...
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...In the book The Outsiders by S.E Hinton we feel more sympathy for Darry rather than Ponyboy. Darry had to miss part of his education and he had to work very hard without appreciation from the rest of his family. One reason why we feel more sympathy for Darry is because Darry had to miss his education even though he had a sports scholarship. For instance on page 16 it says “But we just didn’t have enough money to go to college even with the athletic scholarship he won”. A reason why this shows that we are more sympathetic for Darry is in view of the fact he worked tirelessly, put in his best efforts, and time. He still did not accomplish what he wanted. He deserves sympathy for this because in the meantime he had to juggle a family, school,...
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...It wasn’t until senior year of high school have I decided that I know what I wanted to do with my career. I had just gotten my CNA certification during the summer leading up to my senior year of high school, I thought that maybe starting off as a CNA might give me a better insight on what I wanted to pursue. I’ve always been fascinated working within the medical field, as cliché as it may sounds but my early childhood had consisted of helping out my grandparents in Thailand and eventually when I moved within the states at the age of 6 I ended up taking care of my grandma. I always made sure that she had something to eat, fixed her sandwiches and fetched her things when she calls for it, I’ve never thought that with helping my grandma would prepare me in a way for my future....
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...In this world, I come from a loving family whom my parents migrated from the US illegally from Guatemala and gave birth to me and my older brother in Nebraska. They risked their lives in order for us to have a esquist life and to succeed without living in poverty. As a hardworking family, we have faced numerous events that could of separated my family apart for a very long time. Now every person that I’ve seen was and is the same way, whether it was alcohol, women or even God. Family, dreams, children and even power. They couldn't keep going unless they were drunk on something else. They were all slaves to something just like my father who was a slave to alcoholism and my mom who was a slave to family after me and my brother were born. Throughout the years my dad has been getting multiple DUIs and was deported to Guatemala when the immigration police caught him, while coming back from work when. My family didn’t want my dad to stay there, so we hired a secret organization to illegally transport him in. After he came back we started to become a family again, but one day when we weren’t at home mostly everything precious got stolen. All four of us had to work in order to replace everything that got stolen that night....
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...times are in need of money and need help to just pass by. This is where the whole paying student athletes argument comes into play. But in other cases student athletes are pretty well taken care of and have it very nice on their campuses. Many students are already playing for free or on scholarships and only have to pay for everyday essentials. Student athletes cannot be paid to participate in college athletics. There are no possibilities where college athletes could be paid. Most...
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...Why do you deserve this scholarship? How will it help you achieve your goals? I deserve this scholarship because I have continuously showed that I am a hardworking deserving student and person. Throughout my life, I have participated in three internships that have prepared me to go into the field of Medicine. I do not only strive to secure my own success, but I help others achieve their goals. At my school I record the football and basketball games so I can help the athletes get recruited by some of the top universities in the world. This scholarship will help me achieve my goals by allowing me to increase my chances of getting a 36 on the ACT so I can get accepted to the universities of my choice. 2. What is the future you envision and...
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...Annalyn B. Alvarez The Life I Deserve Life would be the best gift God had given us. Without this, nothing seems to be possible here on earth. Life keeps us on breathing and living. But with this topic, I am here to talk about my life specifically on how I made it up to here now. Ladies and gentlemen, I am Annalyn Alvarez. Good afternoon! We do have different lifestyle, for the primary reasons that we came from different families and different places, but one thing is for sure, we all have our dreams and plans with our life. I came from a simple family in Calatagan Batangas. I attended a public elementary school and with the help of scholarship, I attended a private sectarian high school. Living becomes so much tougher during those high school days because of financial problem but still I studied very hard during my three years in high school and became on top. Senior year came and with the help of my sister’s husband it became less stressful with us, though it became that way, I felt that I am flopping in my academic subjects and didn’t concentrate well. I don’t know why but studying is not the priority anymore though I knew that I am aiming to be on one of the top students again to gain scholarships in my chosen university. But, graduation came and I didn’t make it. I am an ambitious person and I really have a big dream so it was a big disappointment and as for me it was my first time! It may seem just a little problem but this started all my regrets. The dream to be...
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...As an average student, I am sure that I am not the only one who thinks that I should receive this scholarship. There may be other students that can spell out a huge list of the reasons why they deserve the Horace and Letitia Newton Scholarship. But, even with those students applying, I am still hopeful that I can work hard to become the recipient of this scholarship. I hope to receive this scholarship because I am strongly committed to becoming a nurse, and I desire to help my parents as much as possible. After years of being a committed musician, I have learned what “committed” truly means. Sometimes it means being willing to go to a million Toledo Symphony Youth Orchestra rehearsals every Monday and another hundred thousand during the “rare”...
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...Donovan Rasberry Shame of College Sports Term Paper Organization _ Administration Mr. Bear April 12, 2012 Should College Athletes Be Paid? “…Three-quarters of a billion dollars built on the backs of amateurs on unpaid labor” (Branch). In recent years, there has been much controversy over whether or not college athletes should be paid. The argument has primarily consisted of whether or not college athletes deserve special monetary treatment over the other students at universities. “College Football Players Deserve Pay for Play” by Rod Gilmore, “Why Student-Athletes Should Not Be Paid” by Kabir Sawhney, and “The Shame of College Sports” by Taylor Branch all voice their opinions on this argument. I believe college athletes should have their full tuition, meals, room and board paid for; but I do not think the school should necessarily be responsible for paying the athletes especially since so many are not responsible with their money. Basically, I believe that the school should not be responsible for giving these student athletes money. In many cases, these athletes walk around campus with rock star status anyway. If they were paid it would further that perception that they were something other than simply a student athlete. If they were to be paid, many of the athletes would simply waste that money on their wants, and not save it for their necessities. The debate must take into account the benefits that colleges and the NCAA reap from these athletes, and in turn what...
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...E-structor Response Form (Your marked-up essay is below this form.) HOW THIS WORKS: Your e-structor has written overview comments about your essay in the form below. Your e-structor has also embedded comments [in bold and in brackets] throughout your essay. Thank you for choosing Smarthinking's OWL; best wishes with revising your paper! *Strengths of the essay: Thanh , thank you for submitting your assignment for review. I am Ann B., your writing tutor. First, I want to point out a strength I noted when I read your paper. This sentence in the introduction presents a question and then answers it: College athletes are supposed to be the best of the best on that level, so why do college athletes not get paid? The question sets up the argument nicely for the reader! Now let’s move on to some areas that need revision. Content Development: A direct quotation like this one is not a good topic or first sentence: McCourt states “The athletes are ones who put in hours of practice and training” ( Evan Rosenfeld and Scarlett McCourt). Your audience may not understand why this quoted passage is important. The topic sentence should present a main point about athletes being paid in your own words. The first point is the hectic schedule. Can you write a topic sentence that introduces this point? I note that the second body paragraph does have a topic sentence introducing a point from the thesis in your own words: Another reason to why college athletes should get paid is they need money...
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...Nick Coleman Professor Todd Aldridge ENGL 1110 29 November 2015 Revision: Essay 2 - Paying of College Athletes Several years ago, the National Collegiate Athletic Association, the NCAA, started out as a young business with a couple colleges under their helm, and today they have grown into an $11 billion industry tasked with the controversial decision of sharing their wealth with the college athletes that made them relevant. Should college athletes get paid is what it usually all boils down to. This burning question has been canvassed various times over the turn of the century with several underlying concerns for the athlete’s futures and also their safety. Opponents of paying college athletes contend that the scholarships said athletes received to their institutions of higher learning should be more than enough. Once a university extends a scholarship to an athlete, that athlete becomes property of that university. With that being said, once on campus, they become “student athletes,” a term coined by the NCAA to justify their exploitation of the athletes that made the infamous organization relevant, and also full time workers as they spend on average an excess of more than forty hours a week dedicated to their respective sports. In a survey conducted internally by the NCAA, it was discovered that athletes competing in more than a half a dozen sports indicated that they too, are putting in the equivalent of full time worksheets, but don’t receive the benefits that regular...
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