POG 100 First Draft Marking Template

Research Paper First Draft | Marker’s Alias: Leonhart | | Author’s Alias: Spearow | I. STRUCTURE/ORGANIZATION | Comments | Introduction: HookDoes the essay begin with a hook/brief introduction that situates the topic more broadly? The hook should make it evident why the topic is interesting and important to generalist and specialist audiences.Does it draw the reader’s interest? How could it be improved? | Positive * Hook introduces the topic in a great way, by analyzing a healthy government, and introducing the topic of how, to succeed it needs the help of the people who vote them in. Improvements * The author could give an example of a regime that turned on its people, (Syria) and thus lead to the overthrowing of the government (Arab spring) to further relate to the reader and gain its interest. | Introduction: Thesis StatementIs the thesis statement easy to identify? E.g. “This essay argues…” Is it clear? Does it make sense? How could it be made clearer and more easily identifiable? | Positive * The thesis is clear and makes sense “this essay will argue that societal politics are derived from the motivations of the middle class as it pertains to the state flourishing” Improvements * The factors that relate to this topic could be further addressed in a few words. What are these economic needs? Etc.… | Introduction: RoadmapDoes the roadmap state how the paper will prove the thesis statement in several parts? E.g. “This paper is organized into X sections. In the first part it argues A. In the second part, it details B. In the final section it reveals C.”The roadmap should use two complete sentences for every section and should state the major point that will be made rather than vaguely referencing what will be discussed.Does the roadmap give an adequate outline of the essay so the reader knows how it is