... * Write the thesis as a statement instead of a question. * Use third-person point of view, instead of first-person: he, she, it, and they instead of I and me. * Limit your thesis statement to a complete sentence of, at most, 25 words. A thesis statement is not a fact, generalization, exaggeration, or announcement of the essay’s topic. Examples of Ineffective and Effective Thesis Statements Thesis Statements | Effective or Ineffective | Rationale | The federal government must solve the housing crisis. | Ineffective | Too broad, vague, or general | The federal government must address the current housing crisis by freezing subprime mortgage rates to allow the housing market to recover. | Effective | Specific | This essay talks about gender equity. | Ineffective | An announcement | Because men earn significantly more than women, employers must narrow the earning gap between genders. | Effective | May be agreed upon or argued | I believe...
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...purpose? What is your greatest fear? How can you overcome it? Write about one specific educational experience from your past where you addressed a fear and overcame it and how you succeeded in this process. I look forward to implement my knowledge which I got by this education to be in better position in my professional career and be a efficient clinical nurse for the assistant of my patients. I fear about to implement my thinking in word and sentence on my essay papers I came from India and this is my first experience in online classes but I can overcome my fear by improving my writing skills by writing different essays and many discussion and in presence As I begin this experience, I look forward to expanding my education and becoming a better nurse for my patients. My greatest fear is being able to write well-written papers because it has been a while since I have had to write one. I can overcome my fear by watching the tutorial videos and practicing my writing skills through these discussion boards and future essays. One specific educational experience from my past where I addressed fear was when I came to this country for this first time and had to pass my RN exam. Although I was afraid, I studied to the best of my ability, took the exam and passed it. If I let my fear overcome my dreams, I would not be where I am now. I was able to succed in this process because I overcame my fear in order to practice in my profession. I am a brand new registered nurse, so I am excited...
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...Everest Case Analysis Reflections on the Literature William A. Dinger Lipscomb University Author Note This paper was prepared for Leadership and Organizational Behavior, taught by Professor Malcom Howell (Author Email: adinger@gmail.com or wadinger@mail.lipscomb.edu ) Abstract To prepare, lead, or be lead, and complete a major expedition such as climbing Mount Everest is a significant undertaking. Leadership is critical in these endeavors. As is the case with businesses focused on a specific vision, the team must trust the leaders to make the best decision for the group, which sometimes means telling a client No. Pride, arrogance, and ambition can potentially be more barriers to success than someone might realize. Qualities such as ambition and pride can be appealing at first glance, but neither of those qualities served the expedition leaders in this case study. This paper will have comparisons of the events on Everest. Showing how the leaders might have handled things differently with only a few minute changes to their leadership style. There will be prescribed questions answered, then compared to my personal business experiences, explaining how potentially the loss of 15 lives on that fatal expedition could have been avoided. Everest Case Analysis Reflections on the Literature Two, well skilled, guides took a group of less experienced climbers than themselves on an expedition to climb Mount Everest. Fifteen of the thirty seven people climbing on that expedition perished...
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...TENERIFE AND MT EVEREST PAPER First and foremost, I would like to discuss Mount Everest regarding the individual level decision-making. The Mount Everest disaster happened due to poor decision, poor judgment, and no reinforcement of the rules regarding how everyone must descend from the Summit by 2:00pm. In addition, the two lead individuals of the expedition, Rob Hall and Scott Fischer were very confident in their ability to bring their clients to the summit. During this adventure, early on, there were obvious issues and signs, such as health issues amongst clients, warning signs of possible bad weather conditions during hike to summit, which they ignored. Moreover, these signs and interruptions lead everyone to believe that there was a possibility, that they would not make a safe return during their descend from the summit. My main concern about this venture was how they both were responsible for everyone getting on top of the summit and failed at taking heed to the warning signs at based camp. Although Hall and Fischer hired all types of individuals they still needed to find out to make sure that everyone that was on this venture was capable to go up to the summit and in good health. In the end both Hall and Fisher lost their lives helping others and still left their clients to survive on their own. Clients that were upon this expedition had concerns but his only concern that he would possibly have to save somebody else during his hike to the summit. They both...
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...reporter or celebrity in their group because they were going to be written about and judged, but this was not the case. There were no bias opinions of people. Everyone was taking the same journey, but their fates were all different. It was vital that the climbers be prepared for the trip to the summit. With all of the environmental differences and the way it could affect their health, they must be mentally and physically prepared as well as have all the right equipment. They needed to produce nearly a dozen gallons of water to meet the needs of 8 clients and 3 guides. Hydration is even more important when in a higher elevation. Oxygen canisters regulators and masks breathing that impressed gas were crucial because it is harder to breath in the thin air. Tents would keep the little warmth they had insulated at night, and they needed the appropriate climbing gear of ropes, harnesses, and wardrobe. Mount Everest is the tallest mountain in the world reaching a staggering 29,028 feet. It is located in the Himalayas and creates the border of China and Nepal. According to Encyclopædia Britannica, valleys and alpine vegetation that have been abused by mountaineers surround the mountain. Over the years, reforestation programs have been carried out to reestablish a livable place for the native wildlife of snow leopards, bears, pandas, and more. The vast amount of snow and rocks have been established as one of the seven wonders of the world and a highly attracted tourist sight for mountain climbers...
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...Greatest Fighter/Fastest man in the world One day a 20 year old man that’s named Bobby Wong Lee was in the gym punching some bags. He has been training and training, one day he believes to become the greatest fighter in the world. He is training for a fight that’s coming up in a couple of hours. After a close nail biting round 3 he loses. He was upset and angry at the same time. His family died during a carjacking 6 years ago all he can remember is the carjackers tattoo on the back of his neck. He finds a poster about a fighting tournament and the winner gets 10 grand but thing is you have to fight the undefeated champion. He signs up but you have to fight first to join and if you do well you’re in, so he starts training with his former trainer Mike. 2 days later, he is now preparing for his fight and everyone is watching. He has fought against the same opponent. During the fight he gets punched in the eye, something’s wrong his vision turned blurry and he can barely see out of his eye he still continues though and wins the fight. But he is worried he lost vision in his eye so he went to the doctor and finds out he has an eye problem. the doctor said if he gets punched in the same eye again he may lose his vision in that eye so the doctor prohibits fighting for 2 months but in 3 weeks is the tournament so the doctor lets him decide either fight and maybe lose his vision or don’t fight for 2 months he chooses to fight and maybe lose his vision. 3 weeks...
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...In the Everest disaster of 1996, the expedition leaders, Rob Hall and Scott Fischer were the main cause of deaths. Both leaders, Hall and Fischer seemed convincing that their clients would summit, but events that year on Everest shows otherwise. The actions that led up to this disaster and many deaths include Hall and Fischer ignoring their own set safety precautions, Fischer not having a well-working acclimatization plan, and both expedition leaders hired inexperienced guides for Everest. Rob Hall and Scott Fischer were the main causes of death on Everest in May 1996. Expeditions on Everest have a set of safety guidelines to follow for a reason, otherwise, negative consequences may occur. Hall and Fischer felt assured that they would have another successful year like the previous one, and when Hall realized things were not looking good for his business, he abandoned his own rules. As Krakauer mentioned, “In fact the only people to reach the summit before 2:00 p.m. were Boukreev, Harris, Beidlemean, Adams, Schoening, and me; if Fischer and Hall had been true toothier pre-arranged rules, everyone else would have turned back before the top,” but Hall ignored the set turn around time, and no one really knew much of what was going on with Fischer. Fischer even started summiting really late. Another factor that plays into the guides having responsibility for the deaths on Everest that year is one that is more specific to Fischer, his acclimatization plan. Krakauer claimed,”Depending...
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...“Into Thin Air”, a book written by Jon Krakauer, mountaineer and renowned for his writing of the outdoors, is Krakauer’s account of the deadliest season of Everest. In the beginning of the story, Krakauer writes, “I can attest that nothing I saw early on the afternoon of May 10 suggested that a murderous storm was bearing down,” (Krakauer 5). This quote is foreshadowing what is to come later in the story, and Krakauer suggests that he and other climbers were unaware and unsuspecting of the “murderous storm”. As the story goes on, Krakauer talks about Everest, writing, “I stared at the peak for perhaps thirty minutes, trying to apprehend what it would be like to be standing on that gale-swept vertex,” (Krakauer 59). This quote tells of the presence of Everest, and how large, yet beautiful it is. Krakauer does a good job of letting the reader know what it is like to be looking at the largest mountain in the world. Lastly, Krakauer writes, “I stayed behind to...
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...Compare and Contrast Essay 5/12/2014 Ashford University English 121-AXC1415E Instructor: Jamie Cooper Student: Katherin Wheat When it comes to writing the compare and contrast essay style, it is one of the more difficult ones to achieve. The differences between these two essays “How to say nothing in 500 words” by: Paul McHenry Roberts and “caged bird” by: Maya Angelou is easy to pick out. As far as the similarities goes that proved to a little harder to give a lot of examples. In the following paragraphs there will be plenty of examples of compare and contrast, give summaries, a couple of quotes and a paraphrase will be included in this essay. While how to say nothing in 500 words and Caged Bird are both well-written essays, caged Bird was more visual than How to say nothing in 500 words because the author painted a more detailed picture which kept the reader’s attention, the attended audience was more overly open to more people than that of how to say nothing in 500 words essay, and the author of caged bird had a bigger and deeper impact on the readers then the author of how to say nothing in 500 words did. Caged Bird was more visual than How to say nothing in 500 words because the author painted a more detailed picture which kept the reader’s attention. Maya Angelou’s descriptive essay “Caged bird” tells a story of a caged bird and a free bird. The caged bird signifies a person with the skin color darker than that of a peach colored crayon, held down by the paralyzing...
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...Which Essay is Better: A Narrative or A Descriptive? Ever read a story and say to yourself, “What’s happening?” Whenever I read a descriptive essay, that’s what I would say. In this essay I would be comparing and contrasting two types of essays, a narrative and descriptive. I have chosen “Are the rich happy?” by Stephen Leacock 1916 and “Sister Flowers” by Maya Angelou, n.d. By writing my essay, I want to give my views on each and decide which I would rather write. Narrative Essay A narrative essay reflects a personal opinion that is based on your own experiences. This helps you bring a reader into your very own mind and shows him/her the topic you’re writing about through your eyes. Telling a story or event the way it happened for you. It also could provide a sort of lesson or moral to be learned from the outcome of the story as well as what the writer did that contributed to it or not. It’s more on a personal level that any one reading could say that happened to them or that they learned from the story by not doing whatever it was that the writer did. In Stephen Leacock’s “Are the Rich Happy?” the author writes about his experiences with his friends, with of modest income. Most of it, all in his opinion, points out the problems or troubles those with an existential amount of funds in their bank accounts. He goes on to give some examples that he encountered several of his friends going through. “A friend of mine who has ten thousand dollars a year told me the other...
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...one will most definitely find themselves nervously googling how to prepare for a job interview. Or find themselves as the host of a super bowl party with no idea what food to make to or how to make it for a large party of people. That is why the authors of “How to Interview” and “…Chili for Fifty” wrote their essays, to help others. At a first glance someone wouldn’t think that the essays have anything in common. Once one takes a deeper look into them it can be found that both essays can be useful to a young adult audience and offer helpful steps to completing separate tasks in everyday life. This is all done by using different writing techniques. Although both have a similar purpose the way each task is explained is different. For example, in”…Chili for Fifty” Eric Michalski says “… you could boil a cow’s head in. (Don’t ask how I know.)”(Michalski 359), “I hate Jalapenos” (Michalski 361), and “If you plan on moving the chili pot, which you shouldn’t, potholders are useful.” (Michalski 359). These examples show that Michalski uses a more informal tone, almost as if the reader is having a conversation with the author about how to make the chili. This makes the essay more enjoyable to read with his personal touch. In the article from Monster.com on interviewing the text is laid out in a more formal manner. The author uses bolded headings such as “Be Prepared to talk about yourself” (Monster.com par. 5), “First Impressions” (Monster.com par. 7), and “After the Interview” (Monster...
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...5/17/2016 WEEK 3 The Essay An Overview of Essay Development The INTRODUCTION The BODY PARAGRAPHS What it contains? Background information, which attracts or ‘hooks’ the reader. What it contains? Topic sentences which follow the thesis statement. Transitions introducing each sub topic. Relevant and generous convincing support (unity) and coherence. A closing remark (concluding sentence) showing the relevance of the support. A thesis statement, which limits the topic and states a precise opinion. The CONCLUSION What it contains? A paraphrase of the thesis statement. INTRODUCTION A summary of the main points. A closing remark (final remark). 1 5/17/2016 Introduction dna noitnetta s’redaer eht teg ot koo H ::::kooH koo H koo H .1 .1 .1 .1 eht ni ecnetnes tsrif( .cipot eht secudortni )hpargarap .2 tnempoleveD .3 .3 .3 .3 neme a S s sehT neme a S s sehT :::: ttttnemettttattttS siiiisehT neme a S s sehT secnetnes lareneg 4 ot 2 : fo sucof eht ecudortni ot )hpargarap eht fo ecnetnes tsal( )hpargarap eht fo ecnetnes tsal( )hpargarap eht fo ecnetnes tsal( )hpargarap eht fo ecnetnes tsal( .yasse eht 1. Start with a general statement (funnel approach) HOW DO YOU CREATE A HOOK? 2.Start with an idea/situation that is the opposite of the one you intend to develop We live in an era where television is the national pastime. Since the invention of the television set, people have...
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...Name: Tutor: Course: Date: Rhetorical analysis writing Pleasant point of view Immediately I arrived at the appointment spot I stood gazing at the view she would approach. Everything was live and encouraging including the caressing breeze from the palm trees near the small artificial beach. Behind the narrow tunnel, two pretty twin girls played their trumpets in such lulling rhythms that stole away the boredom of the park. They seemed to draw the attention of the music lovers as they easily shifted from tune to tune. The parrot picked the words and helped to amplify the popular classical compositions that everybody associated with in Indiana. Even the gardener in the flower bed extension realized the vivacity in the park, unlike her early morning hour. The rose, lily, and hibiscus flowers intermarried like formally wed couples that cited the parents for the good parenthood they had attained. She adjusted her helmet and radiantly gazed at the tunnel point a time when an oak tree danced shaking off its bright red, blue and orange canopy of leaves. The leaves fell from above like the rare rain in the semi-desert covering everything that the tree’s shade touched. It sent a spring of motion among the other hidden creatures including the white and black -spotted wild cats who whimpered and rolled over the blanket that had formed in their place. The horse neighed in a rather merry mood as the queue of children anxiously anticipated to take a ride that quantified the time spent...
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...Changes 4 1.2 Thin Clients Page Content 4 1.3 Ordinary PC v/s COGITATE Content 5 1.4 Solutions Content 6 1.4.1 Solutions for Hotels 6 1.4.2 Multi-user Computing 6 1.5 Net Computer Series Content 6 1.6 Testimonials 6 1.7 Enquiry 6 28/10/11 General Changes - Remove 'overview' from the menu. No point having home and overview separately. Put home as a menu item – this is opened by default and the page content is the same as the overview page. Remove home from the circle in the edge. - Solution should be a drop down with 2 parts: - Solutions for Hotels - Multi-user Computing - Rename 'net books' as 'Net computer series’ - Change 'reviews' to 'testimonials'. - Remove 'Cogitate Computer Layouts' from the overview page. (note layout is one word- not lay-out) - Remove ‘Support’ menu item - Add a new menu item called ‘Ordinary PC v/s COGITATE - Rename ‘Buy Now’ to ‘Enquiry’ - In the overview page, change 'Welcome to Cogitate' to 'Cogitate' Note: the order and names of the menu items: * Home * Thin Clients * Ordinary PC v/s COGITATE * Solutions * Net Computer Series * Testimonials (vertical menu) * Enquiry – this will lead to a submit form like in ezeecloud Home Page Title tag: COGITATE – Thin Client Solutions and Net Computer Series Meta Desc: Cost effective and Green Thin Client Software and Hardware Solutions Keywords: Thin Clients, Diskless PCs, Net Computers, Thin Computing Thin Clients Page Content ...
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...Everi THE INTERACTION OE COGNITIVE BIAS, PSYCHOLOGICAL SAEETY, AND SYSTEM COMPLEXITY Michael A. Roberto B usiness leaders and scholars have learned important lessons from tragedies such as the Challenger disaster, the Bay of Pigs fiasco, and the Three Mile Island accident.' Similarly, we can leam important lessons about leadership and decision making from the unfortunate events that took place on Mount Everest several years ago. Survivors have offered many competing explanations for this tragedy. While they have focused on the tactical blunders, this research examines the underlying cognitive, interpersonal, and systemic forces that played a role in the incident. This conceptual analysis suggests that cognitive biases, team beliefs about interpersonal risk taking, and system complexity interacted to create a fatal disaster. Incredible achievement and great tragedy unfolded on the treacherous slopes of Everest on May 10, 1996. TVventy-three people reached the summit along the South Col route in Nepal on that day, including Rob Hall and Scott Fischer, two of the world's most skilled and experienced high-altitude climbers. Unfortunately, Hall, Fischer, and three members of their expeditions died as a storm enveloped the mountain during their descent. Others barely escaped with their lives after many hours wandering in the dark while braving subzero temperatures. Hall, the leader of the Adventure Consultants expedition, had established an impressive track...
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