...SMARTHINKING's E-structor Response Form (Your marked-up essay is below this form.) HOW THIS WORKS: Your e-structor has written overview comments about your essay in the form below. Your e-structor has also embedded comments [in bold and in brackets] throughout your essay. Thank you for choosing SMARTHINKING's OWL; best wishes with revising your paper! *Strengths of the essay: Welcome, Jenny! My name is Elizabeth R. I’ll be helping you with strengthening your memorandum about the decision to give the donated heart to Jerry. Now, let’s take a look at your draft, starting with a strength. Your presentation of each candidate is clear with a balanced discussion of the pros and cons of each claim. *Jenny 5806136 has requested that you respond to the Main Idea/Thesis: The memorandum should tell the reader exactly what the issue is and give all the essential information in the subject line and in the first sentence of the first paragraph. Your subject and first sentence are too general: * Transplanting Organs * The purpose of this memorandum is to inform you that the recipient of the organ transplant has been chosen. Your memo is not about organ transplants in general; it is about the decision to give a heart to Jerry. What will you say in the subject line to tell your readers exactly what the memo is about? Avoid an announcement style in your first sentence. Instead, state the topic. For example, “The committee has decided to implement three changes to improve...
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...Documentary: [pic] Brief Theme: Starts with us going to the future. 2011 – 20011. A girl is going through a library and runs through a book called “apna guru kon chee”. (Saying from shreemat bhagvat) The book tell us how the sanstha was established ect ect …. She’s once of our grandchild. Notes: • Put in rhetorical question in between the video to keep the audience Concentrated • They didn’t have it in the past nor will they have it in the future we have it now so treasure it. • Sound of footsteps, poem said on voice over, images of library shots of library, pics of memory (mother baby, life form growing.etc) • Voice over = audacity • Memory = mom n child … etc Theme: On screen ‘Year – 200011’ Girl walking through a library – scene is walking on street then going in the library and then walking through the library searching for a specific book. While this scene is going on, the following poem is recited (voice over). Let nothing hold you back from exploring your wildest fantasies, wishes, and aspirations. Don't be afraid to dream big and to follow your dreams wherever they may lead you. Open your eyes to their beauty; open your mind to their magic; open your heart to their possibilities. In this paragraph there should be footsteps and a picture of a library Dare to dream. Whether they are in colour or in black and white, whether they are big or small, easily attainable or almost impossible, look to your dreams, and...
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...Douglass, written by Frederick Douglass, and the play, A Raisin in the Sun, by Lorraine Hansberry. Both text touch on the African American life, however occur in two different time periods. For example (Raisin), occurs post Civil War era, during a time in America where African Americans are free, yet face the hardships of entering a new life as an “American”; on the other hand (Douglass) takes place during the time of slavery in America, and portrays the story of Frederick Douglass and his struggle with slavery. It is important to note both texts significantly influenced America during their time of publication, and both share very similar ideologies. Take for example both text place an emphasis on the ideology of finding happiness, or at least pursuing happiness; yet both text take an entirely different approach...
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...am going to set the main features of temperance that Josef Pieper established in his book of The Four Cardinal Virtues, and I will provide a brief analysis of why chastity is necessary to bee happy. Also I will try to explain the relationship between intemperance and despair that Pieper describes. The thesis of Pieper is, that the order of temperance can only be implemented looking for you but in a detached manner. Accept the real relationships. The self-possession of the self is not feasible while still putting exclusive look on the human selfishly own. Because of this real relationship, the first of all resides in the ontological dependence upon the Creator. Therefore, power temperance advocates as inner realization. As the main component of the disorder is within man himself. Hence, main element of disorder is oneself: the self. Is oneself the one that judge and decide to incline to the evil. In the first place, I am going to give Pieper´s definition of the virtue of temperance. He defines the virtue as a “cardinal virtue that help the men to dispose various parts into one unified and ordered whole.” , therefore, in simple words, temperance is the order and harmony within the man. To start I am going to exposed in a better way what is temperance, so in that way it can be understood the relationship of this virtue with happiness and despair. Sto. Thomas, establishes,"...to be what is temperance (ordering on the inside) the first and most immediate effect of temperance...
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...having three elements; a company board, a chairman, and a Chief Executive Officer. Chief Executive Officers have a unique role in today’s business. According to David Elsum, the “chief executives are responsible for company effectiveness, efficiency, profitability, and liquidity” (1988). In essence, the Chief Executive Officer should be highly effective to bring change and executing the company’s vision while being efficient with resources in order to increase profits. The board’s primary responsibility is to hire a Chief Executive Officer best suited to grow and lead the company. Once the Chief Executive is appointed, they will either strengthen or weaken the company through the actions they make. It is critical that company boards look at the morals of their candidates to ensure they have a history of making...
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...subjects from many countries were studied. They were shown photographs of facial expression and asked to identify what emotion was shown from a list of six to ten possible choices. If emotions are universal then people from different countries should ascribe the same emotion to the same photographs. The figure below shows six of the photographs used by Silvan Tomkins in 1962: Data was collected on 21 literate countries: Africa, Argentina, Brazil, Chile, China, England, Estonia, Ethiopia, France, Germany, Greece, Italy, Japan, Kirghizistan, Malaysia, Scotland, Sweden, Indonesia (Sumatra), Switzerland, Turkey and the USA and the results suggest that, across all cultures, people are very good at recognizing happiness, anger, fear, sadness, disgust and surprise, with happiness, sadness and disgust being judged almost universally correct. It may be objected that limiting the subjects’ choices to a list of ten possible options increased the likelihood of success and so Izard (1971) allowed people in Britain, France, Greece and America to give their own word for each photograph. Boucher & Carlson (1980) did the same in America, Malaysia...
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...novel’s final word, “past” (180), Fitzgerald uses simple closing words to represent a deeper, continuous meaning that pervades the book. By doing this, Fitzgerald is able to outline major themes in the novel, including facial expressions, honesty, and balance. Most clearly and powerfully, however, the outline of lightness through positive imagery and darkness through negative imagery is presented in the final lines of each chapter. By grouping the chapters by hopefulness shown in their respective final lines, a trend is apparent. In chapters one through three, the final lines provide a dark, sullen preview for the chapters to come, while chapter four provides a transition into the final lines of chapters five and six, which signify a brief sense of giddiness that begins to darken. Finally, the last lines of chapters seven through nine mark the development and completion of the violent “holocaust” (162). Supplying a preview at the end of chapter one as to the violence to occur later in the novel, Nick says he is “alone again in the unquiet darkness” (21). By stating the word “darkness” at the end of the first chapter, Fitzgerald can ultimately emphasize the fact that eventually, the plot will take a cold, deep, serious turn for the worse. Moreover, it shows the ambiguity of the first chapter, as the reader does not yet know much about the characters’ personalities or actions. This ambivalent image can...
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...communication will ensure the proper message is sent and received. Facial expressions are the most common form of demonstrative communication. Nayad 2011, “Research estimates that body language, including facial expressions, account for 55 percent of all communication” (Physical Nonverbal Communication, p. 1). A positive facial expression example is as simple genuine smile of happiness. Of course interpreting variances of the smile can be positive and even negative dependent upon interpretation. For example, the interpretation of a grin can be seen as a sign of arrogance dependent on the connotation and is an example of a negative facial expression. Another example of a negative facial expression is the ever popular frown displaying sadness or disappointment. Effective use of demonstrative communication is extremely important in delivering a message properly. Specifically, if presenting a business brief to a corporate body an effective facial expression would definitely be of a serious nature, devoid of smiles, grins, and frowns. Polar opposite in this scenario would be displaying a look of...
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...inexplicable literary phenomenon: a brief, bright comet, brilliantly distinct from every other writer of his time. In his poem “I looked here”, he mentions about his feeling about the love. In fact, for many people, the poem illustrates the author’s idea that we can get the true love if we always look for it. However, in the variation based on Crane’s poem, it is unlike the original because of several unique and significant factors about how people can touch the love, what the true love is and the techniques used to illustrate the ideas. Firstly, by contrast to the original, the variation emphasizes that people can get happiness only if they try their best to achieve it in their lives. In fact, some critics stress that the original poem is based on some factors in the author’s personal life rather than containing a meaning or any idea. In their mind, they provide that this poem is about maybe a love Crane had in the past. Perhaps his lover had passed away before Crane created the poem and he realized that he could find her only in his heart, and there she would stay. Because of that, he has not found another fairer than she, the one in his heart. Others believe that the poem is talking about two different women Crane loves. One he has looked for over and over again and the love he needed and wanted most was with him all along. However, unlikely the original, the variation focuses on demonstrating an idea that the love only gotten if we attempt to look. For example, at the beginning...
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...Six Dimensions of Health Worksheet Part 1 For each of the following six dimensions of health, list at least one characteristic, activity, belief, or attitude that reflects that dimension in your life. Provide a brief explanation with each example. Refer to Ch. 1 in the text for explanations of these dimensions. Physical health: I teach and participate in dance classes for 5-10 hours a week. I think that this would be an example of activities of daily living because it is something in my life that I do almost daily. Social health: I interact with my neighbors and family on a daily basis. This helps with my interpersonal aspects of my social life because I have satisfying interactions with the people in my daily life. Intellectual health: I always try to make sure that I view everything through positive eyes. I think that this helps maintain intellectual health because it helps me be able to think clearly and use my brain power effectively. Environmental health: I think that I have a high level of environmental health. I like to reuse as many things as I can. I like to try to find new things to do with the containers that I have used all of the things from. I am the type of person that believes things like if you need to cut down a tree you should plant a new one. Emotional health: I express my emotions all the time. Sometimes they may not be the correct emotions at the time or they are a little intense but at least I feel I don't lack in that department. I...
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...migrant family and the the work ethic instilled into me derives from my parents. Being a lower middle class citizen is perfectly fine for me, but money often gets tight when rent is due and seeing stress in the eyes of my parents hurts me knowing I can do nothing about it. This was until my sister advised I looked for a job. The hunt for a job was very difficult, I often found myself on the internet for countless hours just scrolling past job offers until one suited my needs. After applying to approximately 20-25 job offers, I waited patiently for phone calls for interviews. Several days past and I was quickly losing hope that anyone would call me back. Until a local supermarket called me for an interview. My emotions were filled with happiness and anxiety as I quickly responded with “Thank you sir, You won’t regret it.”. I knew working at a Supermarket won’t make me a lot of money, but it will help enough to pay the small bills and hopefully provide some relief to my parents....
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...want at his fingertips. But he often found himself feeling unfulfilled and empty. So he left that world to go find himself and to fill the void in himself. “One must find the source within one’s own Self, one must possess it. Everything else was seeking-a detour, error. These were Siddhartha’s thoughts; this was his thirst, his sorrow.” (pg.7-8) After leaving his home, Chris described his home life. How it was a complete lie, all of the happiness was fake and after learning the truth about his parents he could no longer go back. Chris knew who he was as a person, but needed to escape the toxic environment he was previously in. His dad had left his old family because Chris’ mom had gotten pregnant with Chris. Chris and his sister were completely unaware of their parents previous lives until a family friend of his parents told him. His whole life was a mixture of secrets and materialism. Chris’ parents offered to buy him a new car, because his didn’t look “nice.” But Chris refused, not caring about the judgement of others. Chris didn’t find happiness is what kind of car he had or how “perfect” his family seemed. He wanted to escape to judgement of others and the fake world his parents tried to keep him...
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...1A 24 March 2015 What is happiness? What is happiness? For some people it is the Mocha Frappucino from Starbucks™ that they have every single morning, some it is the moment their first child is born, and to me, well like most people, have not quite figured that out yet. In Eric Weiner’s eye-opening novel, The Geography of Bliss, Weiner travels to each corner of the earth to try and figure out what really makes people happy, why, and if there really is a science behind it. As Americans, our point of view of other countries is somewhat clouded due to how involved we are with our own but we cannot deny that we are not the happiest country in the world. What makes our country so unhappy? That question is as difficult to answer as what makes certain people and places happy because it can depend on so many factors. We, as citizens of the United States have many things we can improve upon to raise our happiness levels and also we can learn from other countries that are happier than us and in some cases, the ones that are not. For example, we value what kind of toppings we want on our ice cream while children in Africa struggle with feeding their families and themselves. Has our live of luxury made us opaque to what can truly enlighten us and help us achieve happiness? America is known as “A Big, Fat, Stupid Nation”, one writer from the media site Huffingtonpost.com literates. Without going into details about the article we can have a brief overview of what America is seen...
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...A Look at Ethics David Schlueter ETH/316 March 24, 2014 Dr. Ellen Beattie A Look at Ethics The three different theories of ethics that will be examined here will be Virtue ethics, Utilitarianism, and Deontology. The focus of this paper will be a brief description of each of the theories as well as the similarities and differences of each. For the most part, all three of these theories depend upon the person doing what is right or good. Virtue ethics is all about achieving excellence in everything that a person does. This theory focuses on the individual and that person's actions. For this reason, these ethics are also known as agent or character values. The theory of Utilitarianism is all about the individual doing the greatest amount of good for the greatest number of people. This theory follows the beliefs that an action is morally right if it benefits the largest segment of the population regardless of what the action is. For this theory to work in a society there needs to be a general agreement of what is right among the community (Boylan, p. 154, 2009). Deontology is a theory that put focus on the individual to act for the soul fact that a person believes this act is inherently right. The person does this act without a thought process, the person just does it because it's what that person believe is right. This theory revolves around the individuals personal beliefs. This theory also is tied into utilitarianism because of...
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...Memorandum TO: Georgia Sias, Director of Class “A” Centers of Louisiana FROM: Dala S. Stansbury, Director of Kid’s Corner Christian Academy DATE: May 16, 2012 SUBJECT: Improving employee morale and productivity in childcare facilities Attached is my proposal to provide director based training on improving morale among teachers and staff. The success of our centers is based on our parent-staff relations. According to 2012 Home daycare overview, daycare centers are now rated below average among in- home centers (Baby Center Medical Advisory Board, 2012). From my experience, parents are complaining that they are not having a good experience when speaking with teachers about behavior matters or in receiving reports of their child’s day. I have investigated further by listening to parents’ constant complaints of how upon entering the center they feel unwelcomed by the tone teachers are using and the lack of concern among directors. Centers in Louisiana are having a problem keeping their staff motivated, which leads to problems that impact the center as a whole. This project will educate directors and staff about the significance of high morale in daycare facilities. When the morale is high, teachers are happy and it is reflected in the lesson plans and interaction with the children. I will discuss the benefits of having a great director, how it correlates to improving the environment of your center...
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