My Thesis : I will focus on how their psychological disorders and backgrounds affect their mental stability as they approach as a group of friends to over throw IT, The use of theme on how each character develops because of it and how each character inspires each even that is occur and the build up towards the final dramatic ending.

Character development generally focuses on how each character helps develop each event that occurs and the build up towards the final dramatic ending. In this story, the protagonist, Bill Denbrough has been affected by the antagonist, IT, who has affected his life by killing his beloved brother, George Denbrough. Upon this event, IT has continued to kill more children because it is stated in the book that he uses children to fuel his body. In the beginning of the story, a mysterious being has caused George’s death. This leads bill’s curiosity to take lead and to start wondering and discovering what has killed his brother. “He supposed he might be able to ask some of those things, but he felt he would stutter quite badly if he tried to be charming… and did he really want to know the answers to any of those questions? After Georgie died it had become a cold house, and whatever he had come back to Derry for was not here”. (Stephen King, 150). During this part of the story, Bill has come to the conclusion of trying to investigate and solve what had killed his brother and why it has done such a thing. This is a critical point in the story because he starts to question why this mysterious monster has show up and why it is killing innocence children like his deceased brother. This leads up to Bill having to track down this monster and destroy it before it harms any other people. Within those attempts, he begins to make friendships with other kids who have been affected by IT too. This leads him to creating a gang with these children which is called “Loser Gang”. Together, these kids have taken the vow to help kill IT with Bill. Thus, this helps build towards the dramatic show down where the Loser Gang kill IT, concluding with the dramatic ending.

WORK CITED

1. King, Stephen. IT. Great Britain : Hodder & Stoughton , 1986. eBook.

Your paragraph thoroughly explained why the grieving process was important to the main character. I thought you could have elaborated more on how it has affected her mentality and why she didn't come to turns with it before. I also think you should have added more quotes to emphasis on why the grieving process has its importance to the protagonist. You have condensed your paragraph so much that it left the reader wanting to understand more of why this argument was important to this character. As far as MLA format and grammar goes, you have shown high understanding and use of it. Although you had spelled "Beginning" wrong, that could have been a typo that could have been easily spotted if you had proofread twice. You could have used a wider vocabulary to help keep the reader interested on your paragraph. All in all, elaboration had the key to making this paragraph a bit well-built, which I suggest you use.