...Final Assignment Misty White COM/155 University Composition and Communication I 1/16/11 Paul Neuhausen Final Assignment I think that paragraph five is an example of more effective writing than paragraph one. In paragraph one the sentences are very short. It is very hard to see were the writer is going with this paragraph. All of the sentences sound the same. I can get lost trying to rearrange the sentences as I read so I can get the writers point. Paragraph five is the total opposite. I had no problem getting what the writer is trying to say. The paragraph flowed smoothly from beginning to end. The first sentence leads way to the next and throughout the paragraph. The writer used sentence variety by asking questions and grabbing the readers’ attention. Theirs one thing that I would change about paragraph five is the last sentence; I would use something that does not sound the same as the first sentence. Paragraph five I think is the best written of the two. In the feedback from WritePoint there were many suggestions on my final paragraph. One of the suggestions was in my first sentence, I used the word “feel” to describe what I think of the difference between the two paragraphs that I reviewed; Writepoint gave me a clearer writing suggestion saying,“ if “feel” is used in the sense of “to believe or think”, it is a cliché and vague; use believe or think.” I think that this is a great suggestion. I was trying to have variety in my words but “feel” is...
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...Final Draft COM/156 September 01, 2012 Final Draft Dose one know why they Xbox 360 is the current top selling console in worldwide but lose to the Ps3 in have the better gaming console dose one truly know why? If one has ever own an Xbox 360 or Ps3 one would have notice that they are both good video game systems. They are different and only one can be the top selling but does that mean it need to be the more superior gaming console. Even though the Ps3 is the better gaming console on the market, the Xbox 360 is the current top selling console in the American market only because it is cheaper They are many reasons the Ps3 is the better gaming console over the Xbox 360 on the worldwide market right now. The main reason for it been superior over the Xbox 360 is because the date it was release to the worldwide market. It was the lasts gaming console to come out of the current gen gaming console. The Ps3 was release a year after the Xbox 360 which gave it more time to add new upgrade to their system to make sure it was the better gaming console. The ps3 was release on November 17, 2006 in the American market with this it gives them more time with the development of the games console to make change to it. The Ps3 also became one of the top gaming consoles on the worldwide market when it was release with a Blu-ray player built in it so it gave its customer the ability to watch full HD contention on their TVs. Were the Xbox 360 came with a dvd player built in. With the Blu-ray...
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...Home Ownership or Renting It’s all About Getting the Most for the Dollar Courtney Booher Com 156 July 3, 2011 Home ownership has distinct advantages over renting property. Landlords and property management firms make hard sale pitches on the advantages of renting versus ownership. Many refer to the advantages listed on http://www.ourfamilyplace.com/homebuyerorrent.htmls Such as, fixed cost for the term of the lease, flexibility in moving, and the ill perceived thought that there is a smaller initial outlay of money. However, they fail to discuss the advantages of home ownership as identified by Elizabeth Wentraub in her article "Buy a Home" that is posted online at http://www.homebuying.about.com/od/buyahome.html. Wentraub discussed that even though real estate values are cyclical; in the long term real estate consistently increases in value. Why? There is only so much land available. Supply and demand dictate rising values. In addition she discussed the property tax advantages, capital gains exemption, mortgage interest deductions, and the use of home equity loans. When all things are considered, it is about getting the most for the dollars spent. That advantage goes to home ownership. As of 2009 67.9 percent of all owned property was occupied by the owner. Renting advocates tout the myth that there is a smaller outlay of initial dollars for renters. However, that is just not the case. Many federal programs allow individuals with...
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...Debra Bohlender Salmonella Home School and Public School Differ Greatly Some parents find the choice between home school and public school to be a difficult choice. While both sources educates the child the choice comes down to what fits the child and what the parents prefer. Looking at home school parents are enticed by the fact that he or she controls how his or her child is taught. In most cases, parents are also in control of the curriculum. When compared to public school seems very rigid with no freedom. Parents must make careful considerations when making the choice between home school and public school for his or her child. While all children in America must attend school, home schooling and public schooling differ in their curriculum, peer influences, and schedule flexibility. Some students need the public school environment to thrive while other students need the home school environment to thrive. One reason public school is so popular is because it is subsidized by the government and therefore, the parents’ burden of the cost to educate their children is cut down. The majority of families in America are at, or below poverty level. More parents enroll their children in public school because they know they can afford the expenses. Public school does have its drawbacks. The curriculum that is taught is decided by the government and each teacher must follow the same teaching method. Public schools must test their students constantly throughout each school...
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...Facebook, Friend or Foe What impact does Facebook have on our relationships? Patricia Fleming Com /220 March 28, 2012 Matt Turner “It has become appallingly obvious that our technology has exceeded our humanity.” – Albert Einstein Because of their growth and popularity social networking sites have in many ways, become a cultural phenomenal that has inched their ways into every facet of our lives, threatening to change the way in which we communicate both on and off line. If you are not convinced, take a look at what is going on the next time you visit your favorite restaurant. Look around at the other patrons; chances are the majority of them have a cell phone or some sort of mobile device lying next to their dinner plates. Instead of engaging in meaningful dialogue, they are sitting in a trance awaiting some sort of notification, tagging themselves in photographs, or “checking in” at the very restaurant you are sitting in; all the while socially “checking out”. Gone are conversations that used to contain the familiar catch phrase “how was your day?”, now if someone wants to know how a person’s day has gone, all they have to do is log onto Facebook and read about it. If that is not enough, consider some of the new words being added to our dictionaries. According to The Huffington Post (2011), words like “sexting”, “retweet”, and “cyberbully” have been added to the Concise Oxford English Dictionary, these words; which were...
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...Traditional and Online School: The Choice of Success Have you ever thought of the endless career opportunities derived from a college education? Are you happy with your current financial situation? In a study conducted by the U.S. Department of Education, National Center for Education Statistics, involving young adults age 25-34, as of 2009 the median annual earnings of an individual with a high school diploma or equivalent was $32,900, while a person with a bachelor’s degree averaged $51,000 per year. With the potential of a 45 percent increase in annual wages, the obvious question is when to start college and where to go. Professional growth is dependent upon education; regardless of current life status, both online and traditional educations provide a variety of possibilities to suit all individual needs. It is important to understand that traditional schools require their students to maintain a set classroom schedule; this can consist of multiple days a week with set class schedules ranging from one hour to 3 hours. The amount of students per class varies, depending on the class structure, each course starts on a specific date set forth by the college campus. Attending class in a traditional school requires the student to go to class on campus, while this provides a stable set schedule for students; daily life provides obstacles for some people that will not make this possible. Online schools generally begin courses more often than traditional schools making...
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...COM 202 Final paper WEEK 7- FINAL PAPER, MUSIC AND INFLUENCE In this essay we will explore the relationship, effects and influence of music on high profile events or movements for each decade since 1960-2010. We shall look at them in three segments First of all, the sixties a new dawn was on its way around the world most African Nations were calling for independence from colonial powers whiles in America, the civil rights movements was at its peak, Civil rights activist like Dr Martin Luther King, Malcom X. the nation of Islam and others where calling for an end to segregation and other oppressive conditions they were experiencing. “ Joan Baez’s we shall overcome (1963) originally focused on the civil rights movements, was a powerful way to bring people of different classes, background ,religions –but one shared value – together, and now has become the song any group trying to stand against old and needing change, practices uses. So I think it both changed, and continues to change the world today. It is still song today by everyone Cooke’s A change is going to come were also influential during the civil rights movements .Although there were define changes but People like Dr Martin Luther King and Malcolm X were brutally murdered. http://www.bbc.com/news/magazine-21143345 The Seventies now was slight better there were some changes and freedom in the air, when the Jackson Five dropped this ABC album. I was young then every young boy wanted to be Michael Jackson...
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...COM/285 Business Communication Final Exam |1) Which of the following is NOT a gatekeeper? | | | |A. An account executive who approves a marketing plan before it is submitted to the client. | | | |B. A program director at the National Science Foundation who screens all grant applications to ensure conformity to the application criteria| |before forwarding them to the review board. | | | |C. A receptionist for a small business who opens the mail and then date-time stamps each piece before passing it on to its owner. | | | |D. The HR director of a large university who screens all internal applicants for eligibility before sending applications to the interviewers| |for a specific...
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...Proof of God’s Existence Charles Porter COM 200 Final Argumentative Paper Is the proof of God necessary? Proofs are used to prove, using a deductive method, that a given necessarily exists. Proof is often like geometry there are given and certain rules is used to arrive at a conclusion of why that given is true. The proof for the existence of ‘God’ has an ultimate goal to prove that God logically and ‘necessarily exists’. If the proof is successful, any rational person cannot find fault in the claim that God does exist. Within the proofs ‘god’ must necessarily exist not just contingently exist. An example of contingent existing would be a balloon is in my hand; prior to making this balloon the balloon did not exist and after the balloon pops and disintegrates it too will not exist. This balloon has contingent existence and it is not necessary. The proof that God exists must be a necessity and should be stronger than evidence that ‘God’ does exist. Something had to create the universe because it did not always exist, therefore God must exist. Many people dispute, thus saying that there is not actual proof that God does exist but that is where faith comes in the picture. Which argument for the existence of God is strongest and why? There are a few strong arguments for the existence of God. First there is the ontological argument which states that it is quite likely that a flawless being...
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...Schizophrenia and Borderline Personality Disorder Stephanie Feeser COM/155F3 August 25, 2013 Judith Rottsolk Schizophrenia and Borderline Personality Disorder Not every disability is visible by looking at a person. Imagine living in a world surrounded by many people yet feeling alone, flawed, damaged, and unable to function in society. A patient suffering from mental illness can have these feelings every day. Education is the key to understanding mental illnesses such as Schizophrenia and Borderline Personality Disorder (BPD). Even though Schizophrenia and BPD share similar symptoms, they are often confused and misunderstood. There are a large number of similarities between BPD and Schizophrenia. Studies have shown that there is a genetic link with both mental illnesses. Childhood trauma, such as physical, sexual, and mental abuse, is a common history for patients with these diagnoses. Neglect of a child has negative effects that last a lifetime. The neglect causes symptoms such as inappropriate mood control, fear of abandonment, and attachment issues. No matter the history, whether it is genetics or abuse, facts show mental illness is prevalent. People who suffer from mental illness have a hard time functioning daily. Individuals with mental illnesses suffer from poor self-esteem and isolate themselves when they are in crises. Patients with these illnesses have contemplated, attempted or were successful with committing suicide. One in ten...
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...accurate and reliable. This guide is to help assess reputable websites. Surfing the WEB There is a lot of information available on the World Wide Web today. Deciphering what is accurate and creditable requires a closer look. When accessing information, these steps should be followed. First, locate the authors name, look for any credentials, locate the contact information, and what authority does the author have on this topic. Second, take note on who published the site, what links are connected to it and at the bottom of the web page look for the date of publication. Examine the domain or URL. Dot gov means a US government site, .mil means a US military site, and .edu means an accredited post secondary educational institution. Dot com means a commercial for profit site, .org means a noncommercial, not for profit entity, .net means a computer network, and .int means an international organization. Lastly, determine the sites purpose. Is it trying to sell something, persuade you, or just providing you with information. Investigating the areas will aid in evaluating websites. The author may have a PhD or be a professor but that does not make him and expert on topics not related to the field of practice or study. Taking not on the publishers helps determine the motive and correlation to the author. Looking at the date of publication helps determine how recent the information is and when last updated. Scenario and Recommendations A patient whom is 58 y/o has developed a...
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...Hemp: The plant that can save America COM172 May 8, 2012 Hemp: The plant that can save America Marijuana, pot, weed, grass, smoke, hemp - these are just a few of the names given to the plant known as Cannabis Sativa. Lobbyists are currently trying to repeal the federal laws making the growth, production, and possession of medicinal cannabis illegal because of the benefits to people with cancer, glaucoma, and chronic pain. If successful this will also make it legal to grow industrial hemp. Industrial hemp can be used for clothing, nutritional supplements, and paper products; building supplies, automotive construction, and alternative fuel sources. With the legalization of hemp this nation conceivably could negate its dependence on foreign oil and reverse the failing economy. From the birth of this nation up to the 1950s, hemp was grown on large farms and in small family plots. Early settlers understood the necessity of growing hemp for rope and sails used on ships, for cloth to make clothes; even the original flag was made from hemp. In fact there were mandatory grow laws in place for years that made it a crime not to grow hemp. In 1937 the government passed a law (Title 21 U.S.C. Controlled Substance Act) that made it illegal to use marijuana for medicinal purposes. In doing so, they outlawed industrial hemp as well, even though it only contains trace amounts of the substance Tetrahydrocannabinol (THC) that gives Cannabis its effectiveness. Most proponents of...
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...Secondhand Smoke: How it Affects the Health of Others Stephen E. Smith IRN 9047136049 COM/150 02/10/2013 Tracey Fida Smoking cigarettes is a habit many people have these days, and fortunately those numbers are going down. If compared with the 1940’s, the number of smokers had a huge decrease nowadays. Mendes (2011), “Gallup and Healthways find the national smoking rate stuck at 21%. Although this is much lower than the historic highs of around 40%, Gallup found from the mid-1940s to the mid-1970s, there remains significant variation across states, with smoking levels in many states still at 25% or higher. The number of Americans who smoke has fallen to 20 percent, tying the all-time low first recorded in 2009.” (8). However, the health problems it brings to the smokers and their surroundings still a big concern and something people need to learn more about. Unfortunately, what some non-smoker does not realize is how bad that smoke is for them as it is for the smoker, the reason they are known as involuntary or passive smokers once they are breathing in the second hand smoke taking in the nicotine and toxic chemicals the same way smokers do. When a non-smoker sees somebody smoking a cigarette the first thing that crosses their minds is how bad that habit is, not juts because the harmful effects it causes to the smoker's health, but the odor impregnated in the clothes, the bad breath, and...
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...University of Phoenix Material Writing Resources Part I Complete the following table with at least three writing resources found in the Center for Writing Excellence. Note what the resource is in the first column, where it is found in the second, and how you will use it in the third column. |#Writing resource |Location |How will you use it? | |Plagiarism Checker |Under the Library tab and on |I will use this resource to check all of my papers and any | | |the Center for Writing |written assignments for plagiarism before I turn them in. | | |Excellence tab. | | |Writing Help on Phoenix Connect |Under the Library tab and on |I will use this resource to get help from fellow students as | | |the Center for Writing |well as use the support tools found here. | | |Excellence tab. | | |Tutorials and Guides |Under the Library tab and on |I will use this resource to give me samples of written papers| | |the Center...
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...Even though credit cards can be a source of paying for college-related expenses; credit card companies should not be on college campuses because most students will misuse the credit card, go into credit card debt and not realize the full financial hole they are in and struggle for years to pay off the debt. The first reason why credit card companies should not be on colleges marketing to college students is that it is very easy for a college student to misuse the new credit card. A college student most likely has limited financial means and a credit card could help today but hurt substantially more down the road. With a limited income, it would be very easy for the student to become financially dependent on the card. A 2009 Survey by Sallie Mae concluded the following. “The economic downturn has most Americans tightening their spending habits, but not all. College students are even more dependent upon credit cards, according to a survey conducted by Sallie Mae, the nation’s leading provider of student loans. The organization released its survey results last week in its National Study of Usage Rates and Trends. The study focused on undergraduate student’s ages 18 to 24 who were enrolled in public and private four-year colleges and universities during the spring of 2008.” [ (Phan, 2009) ] Another misuse of credit card spending occurs when the student is trying to fit into a social crowd among its peers. Many students feel a need to be part of socially acceptable “cool” crowd...
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