...Introduction In this brief essay, I will review Joy (2016) week five assignment utilizing the Capella University Writing feedback tool (2016). The essay will cover the body and organization of the essay and the body of evidences that was utilized in the essay. Message to peer Joy you did a good job research and gathering information for your topic. You have strong statistical elements throughout your essay that if utilized correctly will help to bolster many of your ideas. Overall this was a good first draft that holds a great deal of promise. There are some adjustments that need to made in an effort to create a more compelling essay. Body: Organization Joy, I believe the over arching idea of the paper was to demonstrate the dilemma that “high-achieving woman” face which impact their personal life. I gathered that because you attempted to demonstrate evidence of this premise throughout the body of your essay. It is important to clearly state the purpose of the essay in the introduction, so the reader has a clear expectation of what the essay will cover. The introduction of the essay should be used to structure the body of the essay and will help you to focus your writing for the topic heading that you are writing about....
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...I wrote this essay for the University of New Mexico. The essay prompt asked me to describe a specific example of a time when I displayed leadership. I wrote many essays while applying for colleges. An essay centered around leadership showed up for almost every university I applied to. For this specific essay I decided to elaborate on my experience leading a Positive Action program and my time working with kindergartners. The essay had to be less than 350 words. The short length requirement was another common trend among the essays I wrote for colleges. Admissions officers read thousands of essays all addressing the same prompt. They want to see who can impress them with the least amount of words which creates a unique challenge for the student....
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...I got off the bus bored out of my mind, but I need the extra-curricular activities to apply for a scholarship to the university. I don’t have a real interest in geology but a trip to the Blanchard Springs Caverns was better than playing sports, or one of the bigger clubs and being subjected to carwashes and other such fund raising activities, not to mention having to deal with the other people in the clubs. The truth is that the geology club had very few people and very few requirements, other than going on at least one event, so it was ideal for my idea of participation. There were only a few weeks left before graduation, so this was my last chance to fulfill the club requirements, plus it was closer to our school's location than some of the other proposed trip sites so less time on a stinky bus, so overall win, win situation. There were just four of us on this trip, so really the bus seemed like overkill, but school rules would not allow the use of personal vehicles, not that I had one, but someone else’s would have been great. The teacher over us Mr. Jackson, calls us over to the sign...
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...As soon as I tell people that I am in the process of applying to Lesley University, their face immediately lights up with an encouraging smile. They then proceed to tell me an informative fact or antidote about Lesley, which only strengthens my resolve to complete my Bachelor of Science in Human Services at Lesley. A few short years ago, the idea of college was not even on my radar. Today, as I sit and reflect on my journey I feel confident in my abilities to not only be successful at Lesley, but also advance my career in the human service field. Turning thirty years old, I found myself at a crossroads both personally and professionally. My options were to continue to jump from job to job with no real opportunity for growth or I could take a risk and make a positive change in my life. A close friend and mentor encouraged me to go back to school....
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...to continue my studies at either Johns Hopkins University in Baltimore, Maryland or Peking University in Beijing, China. Both universities are good and have multiple programs. I will discuss how both universities are similar, what John Hopkins University has to offer, and what makes Peking University different, which will assist me in deciding what university is best for me. To begin, I will start with the similarities between the two universities. Both of the schools are well known in their respective countries, in addition the schools also offer the medical school program. Which is one of the key things I'm looking for in college. Another thing the schools share in common is they both give very good scholarships to the students who manage to get in.One final similarity between the two schools is that they both have a positive rate of graduation, however they are different in other areas that will be discussed....
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...The mission of Liberty University’s master of education school counseling program is to help graduate students prepare to work as school counselors in any learning environment that they desire to work in whether it is elementary, middle, high school, or the college level. The other mission goals for this program is teach graduate students from a biblical perspective in order for students to apply that perspective by helping children and adolescents with their academics, career, and social development. Mission goals also require that school counseling graduate students tend to not only children’s academic needs but also their mental health as well. This mission aligns with my personal goals in a way that as a future school counselor, I want to be a positive example when working with students and not only motivate myself to become a better person but to also help motivate them as well by making the right life decisions. The way that the mission aligns with my professional goals is that I also want to help students reach their full potential by help guiding them on what next steps to take in life whether it comes to choosing classes, preparing them for college, and help preparing for their desired career field. My main goal as a school counselor is to be a helping hand to students by becoming not only a positive influence but also making them feel worthy enough to achieve who they want to be in life just as how I was prepared as a young child. The way I form effective relationships...
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...I would be a good fit for the University Scholars Program at Stony Brook University because I strive consistently throughout my educational years to do better academically. I have maintained a GPA of 4.0, and is currently taking challenging classes, such as AP Calculus BC, AP Literature and Virtual Enterprise. Five years ago, I was still an ESL student, a girl in the worst class of my grade. English was a tough barrier in the way of my road to excellent education, but I overcame that obstacle by dedicating my leisure time to studying vocabularies, grammars, and all the other components of English Language Art. I believe that the only difference between humankind and animals is the way humankind challenge themselves to solve complex problems and to turn the impossibles into possibles. So, here I am, still provocating myself to study deeper into this language of art. To many, this would have been nothing. Yet, to me, this was how I survived ‘till the end of the game....
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...Applying to college is a big deal, but finding the school that fits everything you ever dreamed of is an even bigger deal. Montclair State University is the school of my dreams and even just being considered is an honor within itself. I can foresee myself being a Red Hawk and I have for quite some time now. There are so many fantastic qualities to be found in this University that I couldn't even begin to list them and narrowing down that list to a few reasons has been very difficult. My top three reasons for wanting to attending Montclair State University would have to be the atmosphere, the filmmaking major, and how accepting the school is as a whole. I recently visited the Montclair State University campus for the first time in my life and I was completely taken back. It's so beautiful, and dare I say breathtaking. Something about it just makes the campus feel like home. So many of the students on the campus that day had nothing but good things to say about where they were. The most important thing, though, was how happy everyone seemed to...
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...The decision to choose to be part of and pursue a degree at Colombia Southern University has been instigated by class and family. Colombia Southern University is a University of choice for many performing students in the state of Alabama. Its importance in advancing quality education programs and guiding students to quality and high-paying jobs has made it a University of choice among many performing students (Manza & Arum, 2015). The University is also known to host students from all over the country and ensure performance beyond academic performance. As a performing student, I feel Colombia Southern University is my institution of choice, in improving my grades and curriculum involvement. The University will not only ensure that I get to achieve good grades, but it will help me interact with other performing students from other states and widen my social circle which will improve my opportunities in life. Secondly, my family has always preferred Colombia Southern University to any other University since my father, mother, my elder brother, and two of my uncles have attended the University. The attendance of the University is considered to be a sort of family heirloom and is the second born I am expected to inherit that mantle as my two younger siblings...
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...My primary interest in the Fine Arts relates to singing, voice lessons and improving my vocal range. Studying at Howard University is of great interest to me because it offers a tailored music major, the Bachelor of Music with an Elective Studies in Business Jazz Voice Minor. Howard University’s unique degree program will allow me to focus on being a singer or performer, while including the business aspects of those roles. Howard University has a long and proud legacy of successful professionals in the fine arts. I have grown up within a relatively musical family and I have been influenced and impacted by music greatly. I have been singing since I was a young child. My earliest memories include me singing to my mom’s favorite artists in the...
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...Besides the university’s accredited academics, it is located in the picturesque metropolitan and historic city of Richmond, which has inspired me with its beauty, diversity, and historical background. I was originally accepted to Virginia Commonwealth University after high school graduation, however, at the time I had to decline my offer. Ever since declining my offer, I have been driven to transferring to the university after completing my Associates degree, which I will be doing come the end of the fall semester, in the hopes of obtaining a future degree from an institution I have fallen in love...
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...I have learned a lot in my first year of college, academically and socially. More importantly though, I learned a lot about myself. To be more specific, I learned what values are important to me. In my first year of college I lacked, personal and intimate relationships and learning environments, a space to practice and grow into my religion, and the exposure to a student population with diversity. It was in recognizing that I was missing these things that I realized Loyola University would be a great fit for a student such as myself. Personal and meaningful relationships are very important to me. I grew up in a very close family of eight children, raised by parents who stressed the importance of having a tight familial bond. I graduated from a high school of only 36 girls, where I learned not only the benefits and importance of a small group of trusted friends and companions but the academic advantages as well. But my college experience thus far has not supplied me with the personal and meaningful relationships I so eagerly wish to have. I want to go to a school that values a small environment for it’s educational, developmental, and social benefits. A school that pushes its students to engage with each other in meaningful and powerful ways in and out of the class room. I believe that attending Loyola may supply me with this opportunity....
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...Explain your reasons for seeking admission to Montclair State University, including what you believe are your academic strengths and interests. Be sure to explain any situations that may have had an impact, either positively or negatively, on your academic record. When people speak of the largest in state universities, the name Montclair is almost always mentioned. To be completely honest, I had never thought that I would want to attend Montclair State University. By the word of mouth, the university was always well respected for its teaching education program. Therefore, I assumed that since I didn’t want to teach, it wasn’t the right school for me. However, after receiving an electronic mail invitation to an open house event, I was curious enough to dig deeper into the school’s programs. From my research, I found out that Montclair State University offered a BS/MS combined program to its high achieving computer science students. I immediately asked my resource parent for the permission to schedule the date to explore the university and registered for the open house....
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...You’re a senior in high school and you have a year left to decide what you want to do with your life, but before you can do that, you should possibly begin figuring out where you would like to go to to further whatever type of education you have in mind. Though there are hundreds of different colleges you can choose from, there are only two types; Community Colleges and Universities, while both are an ideal path for a student coming out of high school, Community Colleges are comparably smaller, offer more flexibility, and are less expensive. These characteristics make them a better alternative for most students. Although Community Colleges are smaller, after graduating from High School, a smaller college might just be exactly what you’re looking...
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...There’s a girl who’s not your ordinary girl, by any means - she’s been through a lot more than you could imagine. This girl not only has faced miles of hopelessness, years of pain, and an ocean of sorrow, but also has been drowning in her own tears looking for an escape. This girl has taken on challenges with fear and fury. This girl is 17 years old, and every one of those years held a new obstacle to overcome. With her eyes full of betrayel and a heck of a fake grin, she doesn’t complain. From four elementary schools to a middle school and three high schools, she’s been through it all. She has been a “mother” to her brother, an angel to God, and a lost soul all at once. She is ambitious, outgoing, and will help anyone who needs it. She strives for the best and even what she can’t have. She wants a chance, a chance to make a difference. She has a story, one that should be heard. This girl is me. What do I have to lose? Here I am, with a mind full of thoughts, a stomach full of knots, and a pounding migraine, but that’s not going to stop me. I am Jaimee, Jaimee Koryn. Where to begin? I could write about how hard my life has been, how depressing, lifeless and overwhelming the world seems, or how many schools I’ve been to, or how many houses I’ve lived in and with how many people. Or maybe I could just tell you about how I have been betrayed by two fathers, and then my beloved mother, who overdosed and tried to commit suicide? Or, even better, I could tell you how my stepfather’s...
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